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Shunyatta
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Registration Date: 28-11-2007
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Please check out my new track 'Jawbraker' and post your comments here!!!
Hey mates, tell me what you think about this, still far from finished, and it still has a pretty simple structure too, but I wanted your opinions about what I should do with the mix.
Any tips are welcome 
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07-12-2007 16:45 |
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chomp 
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boooooooooow !
ATTACK !
quicksteps ! could be cool for a mix end...
i wait till the finished tune.
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07-12-2007 16:51 |
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Shunyatta
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Sorry, I didn't quite get what you meant! 
and I want to apologize for the typo! Jawbreaker 
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07-12-2007 16:58 |
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OBLIVION12
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Registration Date: 16-11-2007
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i like the beats, the patterns sound original, bring the bass more forward coz its hard to hear. yeah look forward to hearing it when finished
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07-12-2007 19:38 |
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Seven Gun
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easy fella.
tone down the beats a bit. they are too in ya face imo. they do have potential tho.
too many ghost hits rollin around in there.
track needs more elements like pads and synths and stabs an bleeps and vocals etc.
the wobble is ok but a bit on the muffled side of things. try and clean it up a bit.
maybe a theme to to the tune would help.
big upz and keep at it.
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07-12-2007 22:13 |
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Shunyatta
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Thanks guys! I'm gonna work on it
this ain't the final mix too! it's just a rough sketch, many things to add and redefine yet! Thanks for the comments anyways!
Rock on 
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07-12-2007 22:17 |
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Binary Havoc
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EZ Shunyatta
wooooahhh..... you need to chill them beats out dude!!!
Wobble bass lacks some definition.
Dont think the bass line works with the pace of the beats. Makes the whole thing sound a bit disjointed.
Needs some more variation too.
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07-12-2007 23:00 |
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Tomos
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Yeah, turn those beats down a tad and turn up that bass. Sounds pretty cool from what I can tell. The hi hats are definitely too loud and like 7G said, the snares are too prominent.
Needs more melody in this track I reckon. Why not bounce another melody off that bassline you've got? Go from one melody to the other and make them play off each other. You could use different sounding basses?
That bass stab that pans from right to left really needs spicing up. Sounding pretty flat at the mo - how about using some chorus and distortion on it?
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07-12-2007 23:27 |
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Shunyatta
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Thanks! I will definitly lower the drums, especially the hihats! Gonna work the wobbles a lil more too! I'm really conditioned now by my pc, cpu capacity really really sucks, I'm gonna upgrade it soon I hope! Then I'll be able to make more complex tunes with more fxs and stuff!
Once more, thanks to all of you for all your replies, you're really helping me grow as a producer
This site is awesome 
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07-12-2007 23:47 |
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BattleDrone
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beats come in too sudden and are too load, the lead drowns in it. Turn down those hihats/rides.
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08-12-2007 15:56 |
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hardplnsdrftr
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Interesting track.
The hi hats are way too loud. The snare is a bit wimpy to me. I'd like a metallic snare that cuts through layered on top.
The bass could use a sub layered underneath, the bass is a bit weak as it is.
Very interesting drum patterns. A 2step on speed & crack.
I believe that you need some dark sweeping atmospheres that drop in and out, changing gradually to add interest and take the listener on a journey. I'd keep the simple structure, it's working with your aggressive drums.
Pretty unique sound. Keep at it.
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09-12-2007 07:49 |
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