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Please check out my new track 'dark twinkle' and post your comments here!!!
hello this is my first track I have put here. It's not really finished totally but I was wondering what people thought about it. I know that the lead sounds like champion sound but I made that sound in reason on the malstrom.Anyway
DRUM AND BASS FOREVER!!!
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25-05-2005 02:14 |
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zebediah
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Cool tune! I'm definitely feelin the synthed out intro. It reminds me of something fairytale like. It's deep. Bassline is heavy and the drum patterns are tight. The kick is bothering me ... too much pop in the attack. I noticed it especially in the breakdown. Maybe a lil cymbal werk would smooth it out ... make it more groovy. Really feelin the mood of this tune ... classic dark chocolate bass rocker with a hint of mystery and adventure. Sprinkle some samples and edits on top and it's about done. Wicked! Boh! Keep up the good werk.
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25-05-2005 05:22 |
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Politix
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Although i really like the beat in the intro I don't think the strings work that well. The beat is very regular and quite hard while the strings seem a bit soft and ephemeral. The bass on the other hand is sweeet but goes on a bit too long before the drop. When the drop comes, it's wicked. Really gritty. The only problem for me is that its so gritty the drums lack definition. Its a shame cos I can hear that the beat is interesting. If the drums could be more audible this tune would really rule for me.
keep it up
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25-05-2005 20:23 |
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equipped
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Nice track, lovin that big drop with the fat synth 
. The amen's are put together really well, could use a bit more beat juggling to keep them interesting. Take that synth sound hitting in the background and throw it through your sampler then add some twist's & turn's with some filter's ect. This would add some nice variation. Some voice samples would be a nice touch and in keeping with that nice dark overall sound, abuze the voice samples with some effect's and automation mayham. Once again thank's for the ear candy, there are some really great ideas's in this track.*****STU MAGGOO***** 
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26-05-2005 02:47 |
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Victom#1
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Those drums are tight, others may disagree but I wouldn't touch them at all. Great structure too, with an added outro.
I expected the lead to do something different after the breakdown, but it didn't happen. Run it thru some filters, or play the mod wheel a little; even cutting it out sharply a few times before the phrase starts over to give it a stuttering sound would be pretty cool.
damn ill stuff ... ^^
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26-05-2005 06:09 |
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stickbubbly
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intro: turn up the the kick and turn down the the high hats.
nice melody
lead is evol.
amens sound tight crisp.
nice track so far. i think the intro needs work but the main body of your track is sick.
nice one.
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26-05-2005 23:34 |
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S.O.T.A.
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thank you everyone who wrote comments about this track. I feel the same as most of you about this track. Thanks for the input!!
LATER 
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27-05-2005 16:50 |
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Darkside
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intro's ok, but the drumbeat needs better eqing, doesn't sound top quality. put some velocity variation on the hihats (volume) to make em sound less mechanical. and if you already have some, it needs more.
lead melody is alright.
eggh the amen kinda interferes with the bassline and creates muddiness, you're gonna wanna get rid of that. quick. that jus fucks everything up.
a couple more sounds in here would be nice, instead of the rehashing and such.
eqing and mastering aint so fresh on this, the whole thing kinda sounds muddy. as do most tracks on this site tho, so i guess you'll just learn with everyone else.
pretty good sounds tho i guess, good melody. you don't get anything horridly wrong except for the muddiness, i think thats what you call it, distortion, whatever, between the bass and the amen, i believe, in the main beat section. surprised no one else has noticed it!
do some filtering, changeups in the body and during the drops to keep this interesting.
good effort, 4/10
peace, hope to see some more tracks from you, hope i don't scare you away 
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28-05-2005 03:52 |
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S.O.T.A.
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man sorry you didn't like it i wrote at the top it wasn't finished this is the first track I put on I guess you can only do one a week I'd love hear what you think of others. I've only been producing for about a couple of months now sorry I have no skills. I'v been djing for about 7or so years now. I guess i'm better at that. 
It hasn't been mastered. How should I un muddy the drum? If you'd write back that would be cool.
Thanks for giving a serious critique.
COOL
LATER
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28-05-2005 04:15 |
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Darkside
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now, now, don't say you don't have any skills. this tune was fine in some points.
ok for the un muddying, its usually the clash of two frequencies that cause it, and there's not enough room for the both of them. two sounds who have too much of one frequency. most likely the bass has too much, well, bass, so you might jus need to turn that down a bit in the mixer.
i kno you don't get the best eqing options in reason, but cut (turn down) some of the lower frequencies on the bass a little until everything sounds okay.
by eqing and mastering i really just meant making sure all the sounds agree with each other, making sure everything really has their place and all the frequencies are filled out really nicely. maybe you have trouble understanding right now, but you'll get it. just ask a lot of questions. it's just like doin good in school.
dude, don't get all down tho. i've been producing since i was 13, thats 3 years (ya i'm young as hell), and i've just now gotten halfway decent at it from constructive criticism from this site and learning more about my software every day (fruity loops). i'm not gonna expect you to bust out a club anthem if you've been doin this for a couple months, so you don't gotta apologize for anything. i didn't mean to flame your song with this review or nothin, i've just noticed recently that some of these guys on here are givin light reviews with no constructive criticism at all, and usually they big up tracks that aint worth shit and leave some of the better producers in the dust. even a guy like you who can keep a solid structure through the tune will become hard to find soon enough.
i hope some of this stuff helps, and if you ever have any other questions about anything production, feel free to pm me if you'd like. or jus start a thread
peace.
by the way, champion sound = 
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28-05-2005 04:53 |
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28-05-2005 05:05 |
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Darkside
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yeah i really crank my bass up too and i usually mess up my effin tunes.
i have no idea about the one in the week upload limit, i don't upload but once a month or so now, even previews, cuz it takes me so long to make my tunes now.
you mean you get a blank file with no logo on my tunes? rename it. put an .mp3 tag on the end and then it should open in your media player. i get that too, i think its somethin to do with the uploads system. hope you like em when you hear em.
if you wanna chat anymore we could maybe use email or pm, its weird havin a convo on ur tune thread?
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29-05-2005 02:16 |
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S.O.T.A.
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maybe....... one more review???
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02-06-2005 07:56 |
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anf0 D
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the lead is alright.... i dont like it too much... abit fairy...
beats are nice, need to be compressed nicely n eqd nicely....
basss is nuts.... the riff is nice.
its hammering through my speakers nicely...
making my phone vibrate around my table.
arrangment isnt too xciting
yeah fark the bass rumbles lol
fairly cruisy track.... could prolly use it during the middle of a set...
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02-06-2005 08:43 |
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wicked_wayz
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I like the strings alot, drums are sharp and nasty, all sounds are well selected and work well together imo
couple comments perhaps
the melody of the reece compared to that twinkle melody; the second note is too long, if you'd make it half as long, and fill in another note of your reece, the melody would fit the twinkle melody better imo, now they follow different tempos, makes it confusing
kick has an anoying click, an envelope could help this.
real dreamy track
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02-06-2005 11:27 |
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yeah I forgot to fix that kick before I put it here, that's funny I will have to try and fix the other part, but i don't think peole like this one.
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02-06-2005 16:42 |
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anf0 D
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03-06-2005 00:34 |
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