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Paki 
Cool Steppa
Registration Date: 03-04-2005
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Please check out my new track 'Schizophrenic Dream' and post your comments here!!!
Ok so I`ve tried to reteel this dream that I`ve heard when I was on coledge...
Also tryed to apply everything you`ve said so... hope you`ll like it
This track has been deleted. Reason: Paki has been banned from the site for creating a second identity and trying to cheat the voting system.
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10-05-2005 00:39 |
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broadside
mentalist
Registration Date: 17-01-2005
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yeah you got some cool stuff in here, definately enough to keep it interesting. a few technical and structural things which no doubt other people are better qualified to point out than you going on aswell though. like the crazy panning for example at 0:50 - no neeed! I like the little vocals although there not in time, but that adds to the spontanuity of the thing.
good effort. 
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10-05-2005 13:06 |
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Rude
I'm gonna get you
Registration Date: 06-01-2005
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128 kbps?? low bitrate... Be carefull with the break-panning! WAY too loud
I looooove those jungle-breaks! But your firefight... 
Nice track though, keep up the good work
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10-05-2005 16:01 |
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cynik
Cp6uja
Registration Date: 15-03-2005
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you improved massively in this one
I like this lucid stuff, dark, atmosphere building. so dark it's frightenning in times
drumloops fit just right. making your own drums would give it more original/personal feel tho
vocals (themselves and the off-time sequencing) are done well and according to the name/story of the track. that goes for tunes changeups/shifts although sometimes maybe misplaced. and make good variation throughout
ideas: that deepest bassy pad or whatever from the intro in my opinion should be dropped out in times that higher pitched synth goes in
filtering in 2:07 let it open up more and then drop the beat!
I really feel this one bro, keep up!!!
7.5/10 only because of panning and unoriginal drums
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https://soundcloud.com/tsai-vidro-voves
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10-05-2005 18:50 |
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Nosrac
Bag of Hammers
Registration Date: 15-12-2004
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Great dark intro sets the dark mood perfectly. The drums come in a bit abruptly, maybe filter them in. The pans are an awesome idea but ya, they are too loud. The layers of swelling bass work very well, but some of the offbeat/offtune synths standout a bit - maybe exchange them for some big crunchy and dark mid sounds that echo back in the mix. Nice change ups with the drum loops but maybe find some way to link them - still a cool stop start structure to this track though - powerful and dark. Yes, a big improvement - keep working on your mixing and crank out a few more dark intertwined tracks like this one and you'll be off to the races bro!
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MP3's: Acid Planet Page
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11-05-2005 03:12 |
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Paki
Cool Steppa
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Thanks gyes to all of you 
Nedd some more reviews.. just to apply what you`ve said
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12-05-2005 12:31 |
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camo
Wicked Producer
Registration Date: 22-12-2004
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Hi Paki!!
Ok.......its downloading...........60%.....70%.........ready
intro: cool synth, you could add a delay, so it will flow better i think. nice fxs!
drumloop is good. stops too imidiatly!nu dl starts to imidiatly. right-left shiftin is bit to dizzy.
3,36:cool, then gettin dizzy again.
the melodie sounds sometimes as without a concept.but its a badass tune!
it kicks ass!!
well done
cheers
6/10
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keepin it rollin`
www.myspace.com/camopdj
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12-05-2005 19:53 |
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S.O.T.A.
SHADOW STAR
Registration Date: 13-05-2005
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hello I'm S.O.T.A., your track is interesting. Maybe you could start out with some hat tapping.
It seemed kind of strange to hear bass in the begining. I know the drums are progresive but you could make the begining lighter. Your drums are tight and i really like the horn melody.
Not to be mean but aren't you tired of that sample. It neads more sound effects etc-records swoops,unghhs and uhhhs,maybe a small female vocal cut? Overall it has a nice feel it could rock the speakers. hell yeah well
LATER
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17-05-2005 07:37 |
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Darkside
Old-School Rolla
Registration Date: 02-01-2005
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nice intro. funky drummer is well eq'd
ah...i would rather u not pan the amen ear to ear, a lil annoying.
some sounds in here are sorta weird.
i dont think its kept fresh enough.
i dunno maybe jus not my thing. doesnt really make me wanna move. good production tho, sounds fresh
5/10
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18-05-2005 03:35 |
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Surya
The Robot
Registration Date: 04-11-2002
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Intro isn't great. Your sounds and melodies sound a bit undefined...
Tramen is heavy, but I don't like that extreme panning on it.
Overall the sound is quite muffled and the track lacks power, there's no real drive.
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"In dnb you should make people jump not swim"
- Pieter Frenssen 2004
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06-06-2005 07:38 |
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