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Halph-Price 
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that snare isn't great. layer snares, it helps. some good snares on this site.
the beginning i know you know it's long, but know that you can make something happen during that to just keep attentions. the intro is important, it's like the headline on a news paper, if it grabs you, you want to find out more.
could replace drums with atmosphere.
or start with the hihats and bassline, and just bring the baskick in then snare. filter sweep the shit in even... it would reduce the irritation.
oh and the drop, maybe get a maximizer in there, the drums are quiet. the snare and bass are okay. hell that snares damn loud.
the vocals are pretty good for the creepy dark feel, but umm, there's a little rule about copyrighted stuff. ya know, i am not sure, but i am kinda sure that's from a pretty recent movie, with hobbits.
other than that, it's a phat fucking song, i love the darkness, it's gritty. the tweak with the snare is good. the basslines creepy, the the counter to the bassline at like 1:30 is good, i like it mostly. maybe the hihats could be a little less reverbed.
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18-01-2005 22:38 |
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broadside
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Nice main hook bass, but needs more variation tune wise. And after the long uneven drums of the intro, I felt for a big rolling rythym you know with a richer bass. Ha ha, like the Gollum thing going on there - introduce that earlier maybe, nice way of adding atmosphere and maintaining interest. Pretty hectic tune, definately got something there. Should be longer tho.
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19-01-2005 00:14 |
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thefunke1
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I would agree with h-p, an intro is great and brings you along into the journey of the song.
Nice tune, a little dark for my taste, but nice work.
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19-01-2005 04:39 |
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arkaeONE
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i know the in the intro sucks but i was workin' on it and it didn't work anymore so i deleted the bassline and stuff. i only wanna know now that the second part works.. it's hard to let a dark dnb (my favorite style) song work i think.
but thanks for the tips!
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19-01-2005 18:08 |
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charleskoncept
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i dont know i know i dont like the synth the bass line is really jumpy and that is good
you need to something to keep those snares from getting dull... ghost out around them more and then layer them with somethign a little crunchier
watch your vox samples....they frown on that shit here..
peace....
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19-01-2005 19:24 |
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Surora23
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been producing for 9mnths TOO!!! woot woot 
ok here we go....drums sound a tad thin, which was always a problem of mine before...try some compression....i dont like the snare...also try some ghost snares on that break...bass line is nasty but oculd be a bit more distorted imho...nice lotr sample...i use one in my shire track...dun reallly like too much...got a bit boring after awhile...
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19-01-2005 20:06 |
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stickbubbly
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drums sound ok but i dont really like the snare u used,land the kick is weak.cool bass in the intro but a bit too loud.. the drop is nice and the sounds u chose are deadly but the levels dont seem right. the snare hit is too intrusive. and the sub is too quiet.
overall its good but still needs a few things 
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19-01-2005 20:59 |
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camo
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hi! a intro would be nice!the drop at 0.40 is very nice. the beat has not much pressure!!!!! i like the passline that runs down
cool track, but you have to work on ya tunes
peace!
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20-01-2005 13:27 |
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Halph-Price
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intro's have to be the hardest part of the song, everything else stems from them really.
it's like reading a book or newspapaer or listening to a lecture, if they dno't have you in the start, the rest will only seem weakend. ya?
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20-01-2005 18:23 |
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23-01-2005 16:17 |
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Surya
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Originally posted by Halph-Price
that snare isn't great. layer snares, it helps. some good snares on this site. |
The sample used is from this site (the JX-305 samplepack I think)
Intro isn't that great, but OK. Drop sounds a bit hasty, maybe make the buildup a bit longer.
Nice switching of basslines, bu they need reEQing to make the sound tight.
Drums could use a bit more variation.
1.5/5 for the track
1.5/5 for the sound
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27-01-2005 15:54 |
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Friscko
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Begin: Nice, no rollin beats.
Vocal: I'm not sure about it.. Makes me think to much about hardcore.
Main part: I think a rollin beat would be better here. Bass is good. I can't make those basses, everytime i try I end up with a hardcore track. And i don't even like hardcore 
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22-03-2005 23:54 |
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Greyone
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Bassline is verry impressive 
just a little more variation and those hits/hats a bit louder
Massive track
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