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kareem kareem is a male
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Please check out my new track 'Upper' and post your comments here!!!

Don't know what I should change or add, maybe you can tell me.
All comments welcome
13-12-2004 15:35 Homepage of kareem
Surora23 Surora23 is a male
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the intro is good but when you chang ethe break it throws its all off...and then when you drop the bass its just not working...that reece just doesnt fit...and neither does the sub...you dorp out the reece and sub, and again imo its just not working...i cant say much else about it...the track doesnt reall catch your attention,a nd a lot of the mix down needs to be re-worked a bit...good effort, but it could deffinitely be a bit different... Wink

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13-12-2004 20:56
charleskoncept charleskoncept is a male
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your intro is nice lots of creepy little things goin on in there.... good for the tension... Smile

your drums are well done... very clean..

your bass line is way to fuzzy for that crisp drum work you had laid out for us...

its seems to me like you pieced together from a couple of different songs... the ideas are good but there is something missing...

good job Bigup

3/5

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13-12-2004 21:35
janverstichel janverstichel is a male
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good intro
cool little sounds in it
clean beat ,nice
bassline doens't fit the track
shame of the rest off the track
there isn't also a melody to catch on
every 30 seconds you change youre melody
there isn't recognision if you now what i mean
but there is nothing wrong with the melody's
the most negative thing in this song is that soms samples sound too fruity (but I have the same problem Smile (check the comments on FEAR )
overall nice track but not youre best i think
cheers
DM

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13-12-2004 22:13
Polar Freq Polar Freq is a male
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i like the crossing sound beeping but it could be with more delay.. the synth is notso good soundin' sorry Smile
at the start sytnh i mean,,
this one now its okay..
nice snares...
could lower the hats...
nice bass... i like it... with the higher synth backup..
nice eq-ing it all fits...
i don't like the wierd sound like a duck or smthn..
but the phased ver of it laterz iz much better.
i like how it stops suddenly.. for a moment the drumz
nice breakz at 2:45... i like it now..

maybe the ending could be shorter..??
peace.. niceSmile

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14-12-2004 02:05 Homepage of Polar Freq
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the intro has a nice melody. Dont like the bass at the first drop. it doesnt seem to go with the intro. The drums are good.

nice track. good ideas. I think it could use more layers.

Bigup

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14-12-2004 02:57
kareem kareem is a male
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Thanks for the comments.
As for the fruity soundz , I'm working on it.

Agree about the duck-like sound, not good at all.
I wanted to change something and it was the last thing I added.
Guess I looked over it.

tnx
14-12-2004 16:27 Homepage of kareem
muphasta muphasta is a male
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quite nice intro ritm changing Bigup . wow that bass disturbs it all. that was a bit too much of the goodness. beats sound a bit too 'marching' with the gosts. some sounds are too lo fi . use more eq tricks on the basses and sphere's. imo it needs more variation a kind of steady sub. and slicks and tricks onthe lo fi sounds.
2/5

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14-12-2004 19:51
Surya Surya is a male
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Intro is nice.

80's sounding swoosh sample is a bit dull though.

Drums: nice n punchy, nice use of the ride.

Wops, those short stabs are out of key with those nice pads... They're quite loud too.
Bassline coming in: it's acually a bit too loud.
Melodies are a bit messy and like you didn't have much inspiration to get a nice groove going. It's all a bit simple and dull. Sorry.

1.25/5 for the track
2/5 for the sound

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19-12-2004 18:22 Homepage of Surya
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