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janverstichel 
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Registration Date: 10-11-2004
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Please check out my new track 'stay with yoy' and post your comments here!!!
one I made a time ago
fruityloops
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17-11-2004 15:39 |
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janverstichel
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the name of the track is :stay with you not stay with yoy
I mistyped it
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17-11-2004 15:45 |
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T.O.R.
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Nice one.
Better then the other one.
4/5
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17-11-2004 17:11 |
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marine289
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Allright, I listened to the other one before this one, and i like this one better. The best thing is the beat, I think you picked a loop, am I right? But I really like how you chopped the beat. That's good. Bassline is also an improvement, although a bit too digital for me. Try boosting the lower frequencies, and putting a low pass filter on it. But that's personal 
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Again: vocals are well chosen, but maybe a bit too much in the track.
I dont know about the melody, it has something strange in it, but i cant figure out what. Also, boost the major melody, and lower the minor melody (hope you understand what im saying here, im not sure i understand myself 
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The break at 5:17 has some great drums. Too bad they only last about 2 seconds. You should put them in a bit more. Outro is a tiny bit better, intro not really, a bit like the other track, try to listen to more DnB tracks (on this site). Some of them have excellent intro's.
This one was a bit better. keep it up.
2.25/3
Oh, i forgot to say that the track could use a little more variation. I know that that is a really difficult thing, but you 'll get better at it when you have more experience.
This post has been edited 1 time(s), it was last edited by marine289: 17-11-2004 20:20.
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17-11-2004 20:19 |
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spudleyq
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whoa......crazy......major distortion.......pretty nutso......the vocal manipulation is perverted man.....i guess i'd give it a 3 or 3.5/5
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17-11-2004 21:05 |
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Jeller
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nice song good beat and nice tunes, sometimes a bit too much patterns at same time but still good
3.5/5
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17-11-2004 22:16 |
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janverstichel
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thx marine for the explenation
i'm just a beginner zo i'm glad you were so critical
I understand the most of it however i don't know how I have to lay a filter on surtent things
the beat is sliced by y myself (so i changed a drumloop)
greetz
DM
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17-11-2004 22:18 |
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Surya
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Recorded too loud again, the sounds distorts with every kick.
Levels are off completely. Your bassline is way too loud. It puches away your drums completely.
The bassline sounds too digital and needs more bass.
Good sounding vocals again, where did you get them this time?
Quite messy switching of synthlines and stuff.
Again, not what I call a good track. Sorry
1/5
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