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jfry 
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Registration Date: 07-11-2004
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Please check out my new track 'The Osprey' and post your comments here!!!
I made this in acid. The voices are from 1940s radio shows..(not copyrighted!)...probably took me about 4 hours. I made the cheesy helicopter noise. This is actually made from my first track ever...so be kind...i've only ever made 4 in total!
JFRY
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14-11-2004 02:14 |
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PaperWall
Producer
Registration Date: 15-10-2004
Posts: 54
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there is a atmosphere thats a beginning
the rithem gets boring after a while
but there is still alot of work
also the template must be changed so there are no boring parts in
but like u said its ur 4 rt track and ur still learning
so i would say keep it up and grow
greetz paperwall
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14-11-2004 03:25 |
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muphasta
Master Producer
Registration Date: 29-06-2004
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listening headphone-wise!
intro 's cool but bitt dull sound. my headphone shakes a bit from the basskick; but hey, kinda cool too. I think the overal needs some freshing up. the editing and the sounds of the story fit well. ad some more surprising noise and some more high contra level (seems like the wright words for what i mean, cant explain it better).
you need some variation in breaks t the end too. its a bit like going on. for example theres one basskick each time . the beats must evolve! ad another basskick or two or three and variate withe them, same for the snare play with the drums. ad some contrasts and freshen it up and then it should be better i think.
but anyway nice, if this is just youre 4th song. cong.
2,85/5
cheers
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muphasta none dnb
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14-11-2004 15:19 |
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Surya
The Robot
Registration Date: 04-11-2002
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Not gonna say anything about soundquality since this is only 64kbps
Intro is quite cheesy. Sounds a bit like a theme from some cheesy emotiona scene in some dull patriotic movie or something.
Drums are quite good, the booming kick is cool. More variations needed though.
Lots of flowing transitions and such... as thechronic once said about this: "in DnB you should make people jump, not swim"
But now I'm starting to wonder: where's the bassline?
Sounds more like a breakbeat layered with that cheesy movie theme than a real DnB track.
1.5/5
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"In dnb you should make people jump not swim"
- Pieter Frenssen 2004
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14-11-2004 15:45 |
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charleskoncept
Wicked Producer
Registration Date: 29-09-2004
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its gotta a nice groove to it. 
the kick needs some variation and so does the snare although for your first couple of times out this is a very good track.
Try panning out the voice clips a bit during your break a bit, might add some flava to it. about your break maybe a little something more to your bass might give it a bit of punch...
keep it up the ideas are there although they need some fine tuning
2.5/5
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14-11-2004 16:17 |
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marisol
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Registration Date: 23-09-2004
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very cool sound. this track could deffinitly use some kind of off beat bass line so as not to interfear wit that huge bass drum. acid isnt really that flexible so you might want to get some kind of sequencer and write your own b line. this is a good start but the loops need more variation. just to let you know it aint easy proggraming your own loops so dont get discouraged when you open up a host proggram for the first time.
keep it up 
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14-11-2004 18:37 |
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stickbubbly
mad man
Registration Date: 16-09-2004
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did you make this with acid or on acid. Helicopter sounds cool. needs some more variations.
nice work. keep it up.
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