 Rythor1 - Another Time |
Rythor1 
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Registration Date: 03-08-2011
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Please check out my new track 'Another Time' and post your comments here!
One of my darker tracks, this is the first song I've put out there and I know the drums could be beefed up a little but I'm looking forward to hearing some feedback, thanks.
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03-08-2011 20:15 |
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Impact
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Registration Date: 29-08-2010
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ez man,
welcome aboard.
Can be nerve wracking putting music up for public consumption..
Ok- intro is nice and dark.. intro dialog could do with some subtle fx (verb? delay?)
like the stab with fx during the dialog
sweeps at 0:48 are cool 
filtered drums are nice..
bass stabs are ok sit inthe mix alright
drop needs to be much larger for such moodiness 
Your kick is HEAVY but it works with the other sounds and layers
drums are a bit thin- snare in particular needs phatting up- try camel crusher or layer mutiple snares
like the bass melody
the reece stabs are less fitting though imo.
Variation was lacking towards the end- but- quite enjoyed listening to this!
Cheers!
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03-08-2011 20:31 |
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doolhoofd
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Dig the flow. Dig the general atmosphere of the track. Could use a little more agression, maybe something like the tight hardcore breakdowns in this track http://www2.mrtzcmp3.net/Illformants_Simex_1s.html
Do not dig the sounds @ 00.21, 00.32, 00.42 all too much, not the biggest fan of those. They're not bad, they work in the whole but they're kinda corny imo
Distorted bass sound @ 02.34 - 02.40 and onward is awesome, fits the track perfectly. You've got like three or four kinds of bass going on, nice work on those!
Personally I wouldn't use the word 'time' as a separatse sound sample, I'd always use the 'another time' in one piece.
Agree with Impact on the variation thing, it is repetitive; but that's the case with most dnb so don't take it personally.
Absolutely not bad, especially for a first upload..
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.:::GENERATIONS PASS:::.
.:::CIVILISATIONS DIE:::.
.:::THE BLiNK OF AN EYE:::.
.:::IN GALACTIC TIME:::.
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03-08-2011 22:15 |
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Rythor1
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Thank you guys for the feedback, great advice on the track, a lot of what was said are things I was feelin about the track like the snare being thin and the first break being kinda weak. I just purchased an e6400 ultra so I'm going back to school for a moment but I cant wait to up some more songs, look forward to hearin yours as well, peace...
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04-08-2011 01:36 |
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Alyiann
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Registration Date: 12-03-2011
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Agreed with Impact , those voices could have more reverb or delay .
I don't like sounds which appears for example in 0:42 , it twist my body as hell, well maybe it should do that
Now about the drums , i like them , hats are very soft but they adventure form ear to ear which is clever and good idea for nice sounding .
I don't feel the bass very good, or maybe my headphones are kinda out of order;/ dunno
Don't know why but this track chill's me very good , but you should spice him couse' from time to time is kinda borind , some faster , slower parts , holdings (lol - crappy name).
But overall is very good ! Sound's are clear and well mastered I like it
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05-08-2011 13:43 |
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I Am Nowhere
I AM NOWHERE
Registration Date: 02-08-2011
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love the start, those samples are nice and its creepy, then thwe melodies come in and it adds more atmosphere and really gives a more drum and bass feel to it, however start the drums a bit later with more sound, it just sounds like background junk early on, drop could be enhanced, hard to see, and also there could be some more atmosphere and drama behind the melody, feels a bit plain, but its good, i do like it and the darkness to it, now make it darker!
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05-08-2011 22:01 |
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Surya
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Maybe add some hats or rides to the intro?
Deep sub, which is too loud.
The snare sounds very thin, so yes, it needs beefing up.
You kind of randomly alternate between the different elements, there doesn't seem to be a clear structure to the track. You need to work on that.
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"In dnb you should make people jump not swim"
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08-08-2011 15:20 |
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shir_pan
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like the mid-bass-stuff goin on quite much, just missin the "basic" idea to the song a little. vocals are nice, though gettin repetitive after like 4mins. drums could use some variation (and beef as u said) imo. track has definitely potential, maybe try structuring the ideas a bit more to make them clear, really like the sounds u create in there! cheers
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10-08-2011 11:33 |
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