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thesiskin
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Registration Date: 14-09-2010
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Please check out my new track 'Yellow Signs' and post your comments here!
this is my second offering - i wanted to make a 'driving tune' with live sounding drums-
I still got my L Plates up so any advice or comments will be appreciated
cheers
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30-09-2010 16:01 |
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BattleDrone 
2161... the future.
Registration Date: 30-12-2005
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Drums are too far in the back of the track (atleast some of them). The extra snare sounds like pumping rock while the main snare sounds like cool hiphop, doesn't work together. Go for the hiphop snare (the first snare you hear in the tune). Don't overdo it on weird sound FX and don't go for wild panning on sounds (left-right-left-...), it's irritating, especially on headphones. Tunes is a bit floating, no clear direction. Too much bleeping things going on, turn them down and perhaps leave them out.
The spooky piano thing doesn't cut it for me. Try some other lead.
Has potential.
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30-09-2010 20:47 |
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tryptech
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Yo man, I'm not fond of that fx alien thing. The snare at 53 is too loud man, good structure. The creepy piano doesnt benefit the track, it works, but would also do without it.
Greetz
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03-10-2010 13:12 |
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thesiskin
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cheers for the feedback - it helps me rule out ideas and decide what doesnt work and see what areas i need to work on(mixdown and volumes esp.).
i think i'm trying to run before i can walk - so my next one is gonna be minimalist and i need to get a few good sounds done properly then build on it.
safe
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03-10-2010 15:57 |
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optikal_assassin
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Registration Date: 18-07-2005
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gahhh, it didn't go wher ei thought it was going to after the first few seconds of listening. after listening to that bad ass hip hop beat, i was like yeah, this gonna be some shit, then it just went a little wrong after about 30 seconds. i didn't catch any big drop, which i was kind of anticipating with the way you were bringing in the intro. things just kinda started scattering with random hits here and there with no real good solid direction.
as the others stated, the hip hop snare would have been better to use. seems it could use some beefier drums, maybe layer up some extra snares and whatnot to give it a little more fullness.
and kick that bass in a bit more. it could definitely benefit from some deeper bass for sure, with a nice solid bassline melody.
drop off at 4:12 was a little misleading. at first i thought the track was done, but with a few more seconds, i caught the last part.
well, i think you get what im saying here. gotta restructure this a bit and change up your usage of sounds here and there. it's a good start, just really could use some extra work. good effort though! 
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