 Vly - The Marry-go-round |
Vly 
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Registration Date: 22-10-2009
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Please check out my new track 'The Marry-go-round' and post your comments here!
So,thats my first track uploaded here.(dont go hard on me lol ;d )I dunno why i decided to be an experimental-dubstepish tune.. but anyway... soon ill be uploading some dnb stuff.
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23-11-2009 00:56 |
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thechronic
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Lol funny title, I hope the spelling is intentional?
It's very musical, but you nicked some samples didn't you? 
On my good speakers the triangle sound is annoying. The overall mix is very dark, and the triangle is sticking out of the top end like a sore tooth. Try make it blend in a bit better. The dark sound fits the track well btw. Also the round bass and kick fit in nicely.
Some advice: you layered one shots over the samples (snare, hh etc), but these need some variations in tonality. The base of the track is very dynamic and full of life, thanks to the samples of real instruments by real musicians. This is a bit in contrast with the static sound of the one-shots, like the snare drum. Put some random LPF and small variations in loudness and pitch on it.
Structure wise it gets boring after a while. I'm now on the third listen and I'm already tired of it. You loop everything every 2 or 4 bars and play only with adding and removing the same elements over and over.
Try working with more of a chorus-verse-chorus structure, with 2 completely different parts that alternate, like in a good radio song lol. Then add in an intro, bridge and outro and you're set 
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25-11-2009 19:48 |
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Vly
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Registration Date: 22-10-2009
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wow,thanks for the detailed comment 
ill consider your advices if Im reworking the track someday.
Ill also consider buying new speakers since i dont really hear anything sticking out. 
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25-11-2009 22:06 |
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dLO
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Registration Date: 29-05-2009
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I dig the funky vibe you got goin on here. I think you hit it right on the head w/ describing it as "experimental-dubstepish" A few things I would focus on are: working on the bass a little to try to make it stand out a little more. Also, try adding some different breaks to keep the beat fresh. From a structure stand-point I'd have a nice build from the intro then break it down in the middle and bring it back up again. I like your break-downs and build-ups but they're a little to frequent to get into a groove. Still, great vibe though. Def diggin this track.
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