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OBLIVION12 
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Registration Date: 16-11-2007
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Please check out my new track 'stone the crows' and post your comments here!!!
i know its naughty to put two on in a week but i fucked up my last track so i thought i better add one that i think is a little better, Thank you to all producers and newbies who have given me good advice and encouragement, Im new to d&b producing after strictly djing for many years, practice will make perfect and i will get there eventually, thanks
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29-11-2007 02:24 |
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BattleDrone
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Pitch that snare up a bit kickdrum needs more punch (layer in another one). The break needs more action, layer on another one or compress those ghost hits so they stand out more.
Some melodies don't fit on the beats. The different parts of the track don't stick enough, sounds like different records being thrown in. Your sampling is too obvious. That end is plain weird for a techstep track.
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29-11-2007 12:55 |
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OBLIVION12
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yeah ok thanks, i'll work on those drums, the ending is a bt wierd lol never got that far so a put a sample of super mario land in! definitely a bit wierd lol. yeah it is a bit predictable at the moment, need some variations in the track i think 
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29-11-2007 13:05 |
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RV_
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Can see where your going with this, funky melody, good switch mix up of bass sounds, definate potential, reminds me of some old BC tracks. I would tuffen up that the lead square bass sound, sounds a bit thin, cant quite put my finger on it. May be bring it forward in the mix and chuck a bigger sub under it, compress them together.
The intro melodies conflict with one another, one sounds like its in a minor key, the other major. I would stick with the first one and work another melody around that, doesnt really fit with the ragga vocals.
I would layer up the snare, compress it and bring it to the front of the mix. Add some ghost snares. I like the extra percussion added later, add more of that. Try adding a sampled break. You need more suspense on the drop.
Little more FX and variation and ur on ur way.
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29-11-2007 19:54 |
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OBLIVION12
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thanks thats some good advice, i will learn from that
regards
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29-11-2007 20:00 |
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Seven Gun
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christmas style intro.... christmas ragga, expand on that.
the kick snare is ok but you need to find a little filler break or two to chunk it up a bit.
the bass riff is good but the samples need some work.
i recognise a couple of the bass samples so i would suggest trying to make your own with a good synth.
also be careful of the panning/stereo on your samples. some sound too wide and some sound too mono.
it can be confusing on the ear.
try and clear the mixdown a little bit too.
add an eq plug-in on nearly every sample and tweak them.
if you have any questions on anything, just post a thread on the production questions and answers section.
you will be sure to get some helpful replies.
big up.
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01-12-2007 13:59 |
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Seven Gun
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